Raising the Quality of Our Writing

My Original Entry

I’ve been thinking a lot about my grandma.  She died when I was 15 years old, and even though that many years and some have since passed, I still miss her just as much now as I did back then.  There’s so much that I never got to share with her like getting married, she would have been an honoured guest of course.

Raising the Quality

I’ve been thinking a lot about my grandma.  Maybe it’s because she died 25 years ago today.  Maybe it’s because I miss her just as much now as I did back then.  Maybe it’s because there’s so much that I never got to share with her.

Why?

I really wanted to show how much I was missing my grandma still, even though it’s been such a long time since she passed away. I used the technique repetition that I had seen Sandra Cisneros use in her story “Eleven.  I used  “Maybe it’s because ……” to help me show all the reasons why I was missing my grandma.  I hope that’s what the reader notices too.

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  1. Hello Room 231!! How are you all! I have commented on a few peoples writing and it is AMAZING! I couldn’t comment on them all so I just thought I’d do a little post here to say well done! Also, my grade just started a class blog and are hoping to do something similar to you soon. Please visit us at sykkate.edublogs.org and make a comment!

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